Interesting, if nothing else
I enjoy the idea that you have put forth, and can see potential, but some things just didn't match up. I think that the art style is a little off for the theme and setting, but it is understandable how this bright theme could be used to tell an interesting story. I just think that a dark, ragged, theme would be more suitable, especially for the plot you have shown. I truly can see this becoming an interesting series. Quite nice.